自己写了一小段话,麻烦给看看那里有问题并且讲讲,Ihavebeentidingupmyroomforseveraldays.Icleanupbottomofmybedtonight.Therearemanyoldbooks,magazinesandnewspapersthatItwasboughtinsecondaryschools.moreover,

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自己写了一小段话,麻烦给看看那里有问题并且讲讲,
I have been tiding up my room for several days.I clean up bottom of my bed tonight.There are many old books,magazines and newspapers that It was bought in secondary schools.moreover,some textbooks was remained.I picked up some helping books.The others will be sold tomorrow.

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你连续整理了几天?而且整理改为sorting更合适.报纸等后面怎么变单数了?需要注意.文章主题似乎,饿,不咋的突出或有意义.不像应试文