亲么,来看看我这篇英语作文语法什么的对吗Thisyear'ssummerholidayalreadypassed.MyfamilyvisitedBeijing,thecapitalofChina.Thereweremanyinterestingplaces.Forexample,theGreatWallwasoneofthemostfamousintheworld.A

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亲么,来看看我这篇英语作文语法什么的对吗
This year's summer holiday already passed.My family visited Beijing,the capital of China.There were many interesting places.For example,the Great Wall was one of the most famous in the world.And we visited other famous places,like the Palace Museum,the summer Palace and so on.I liked my summer holidays were out.I thought these were very harry.I like my summer holiday.

Answer 1

This year's summer holidays have passed already.
这句忙你改成完成时态,并把alreay放到句尾,holiday改成复数.
也可以说成：this year's summer holidays have already past.
During that two months' holidays,My family visited Beijing,the capital of China.
这句话,为了和上面那句话比较顺接,多了前面多一个时间状语.
There were many interesting places.
这句没有改.
For example,the Great Wall is one of the most famous places in the world.
这句在famous后面加了places,当然不加也可以,但是比较随意不正式.was改成is.
And we also visited other famous places,like the Palace Museum and the summer Palace.
这句在we后面加了副词also,也,后面的and so on去掉.
I liked my summer holidays were out.
这句话,我不知道你要说什么.如果你是要说,我喜欢整个暑假都在外面玩.
你可以说成：I like travelling in my summer holidays.
或者：这个暑假我呆在外面,我很享受.
I enjoyed being out in this summer holidays.
I thought these were very harry.
这句话改成：I think it happy.
I like my summer holiday.
这句话改成：I like my summer holidays.