adiary（初三、作文求批阅、、）May,15th,2006Monday,Sunny根据下列提示,写一篇日记.1.时间:2006年5月15日星期一晴2.内容:这天早晨,我起床晚了没吃早点就去上学,骑车途中我感到眼前一黑就从车上

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a diary（初三、作文求批阅、、）
May,15th,2006 Monday,Sunny
根据下列提示,写一篇日记.
1.时间:2006年5月15日 星期一 晴
2.内容:这天早晨,我起床晚了没吃早点就去上学,骑车途中我感到眼前一黑就从车上摔下,醒来时发现自己躺在医院里.听医生说是一位青年把我送来,不知其姓名,这使我感动的流泪,医生让我别紧张,吃些药休息一下就好了.
3.要求:合乎规格,字数80—100个.
dizzy:头晕的,眩晕的
be moved to tears:感动的流泪
This morning,I overslept,so I hurried to school without breakfast.I felt dizzy while I was on the way and fell down from the bike.When I woke,I found myself in hospital.'A young man sent you here.But we don't know his name.'a doctor told me.I was moved to tears.The doctor asked me to rest for a while and not to be tense.I will soon be Ok after taking some medicine.
==、==、=、=没检查过、、见谅见谅、

Answer 1

我的建议：
在felt前面加suddenly（突然地）,整个句子改为I suddenly felt dizzy when I was riding and fell down from the bike.
下一句,woke 后加 up.然后在hospital前加the.（注：in hospital表生病住院；in the hospital 在医院里.此刻由于“我”刚醒来,所以觉得用in the hospital好一点).
下一句：把 told 改为said.told多用于间接引语,而直接引语常用said.
最后一句：句首加上he said ,并把will改为would.
嗯 都是些小问题 .
That's all.