英语高手请批改一下这篇文章这是一篇关于“此地无银三百两”的故事ThereisnomoneyinthisplaceLong,longago,therewasarichmaninatowncalledZhangSan.Oneday,hewasstayinhishouseandlookedathismoney.Hetho

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英语高手请批改一下这篇文章
这是一篇关于“此地无银三百两”的故事
There is no money in this place
Long,long ago,there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.
One day,he was stay in his house and looked at his money.He though,’ My house is not big enough to put my money,I must look for a place to put it.’ Soon,he saw the garden and decided to put his money in the garden.
He went to the garden and put the money in the ground.After a minute,he though,’ If a thief come to my house and take my money away,I will become poor.I must tell the thief not to take my money away.’ So he wrote ‘There is no money in this place’ on the wall.
Zhang San has a neighbour called Wang er.He looked it and took the money away.But he was worried about who took away the money.So he wrote ‘Your neighbour has never taken your money.’
How silly the two men was!

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目前找到的 :...(重要的错误你没怎么改..)
there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.
这个called的位置不太好,可能引起歧义
.请紧接被修饰词
he was stay 我..还是无言
He though,’
thought
My house is not big enough to put my money,
这里用的to put my money不太好...
he saw the garden 用his garden更好
If a thief come to my house and take my money away,I will become poor.
comes,takes
He looked it look是vi.这里应该用saw
saw this或者 saw Zhang San hide his money都可以
(补...He saw Zhang San hide his money 为了万无一失..,明确一下主语是Wang Er会更好)
But he was worried about
ABOUT后面放这个从句不太好.而且时态不对
How silly the two men was!men 用were...