帮我看一下优美语法错误或者单词时态之类的不对的,或者那里语句不通顺的!MychangedHowI'vechanged?Doyouwantknow?OK!Letmetellyou!WhenIwasachild,Iusedtobeafraidofthedark,forme,thedarkisveryterrible.

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帮我看一下优美语法错误或者单词时态之类的不对的,或者那里语句不通顺的!
My changed
How I've changed?Do you want know?OK!Let me tell you!When I was a child,I used to be afraid of the dark,for me,the dark is very terrible .But now,I am not terrified of the dark,and I'm used to terrifiedspiders,for this,I have no chang.Uh-huh.About appearance.When I was a child,I used to be short,now,I'm a talled.And I used to have long hair,now,I just have short hair...I'm so depressed!I like long hair!For learning,I used to like gym class and art class,but now,I don't like gym class,so tired!Really!In fact,I want to be a child!

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My changes（我的变化）
Do you want know how I've changed?OK!Let me tell you!
When I was a child,I used to be afraid of the darkness.For me,the darkness is very terrible .But now,I am not terrified of darkness,and I was terrified of spiders,which now I am still terrified of.Uh-huh.And my appearance changed a lot.When I was a child,I used to be short,but now I'm taller.I used to have long hair but now I have short hair...I'm so depressed when it comes to long hair(当听到长发我是如此的不爽) !I like long hair!As for learning,I used to like gym and art,but now I don't like gym any longer—it’s so tiring!
How I wish to be a child again!（我多么渴望再做一个孩子啊）
我已经全部修改好了,一切都好了.（我是高中英语教师,介词给学生批改书面表达）