谁来帮我看下这篇英语文章(短篇滴`)有没有语病``?Goodmorning,everybody!AgreatmannamedJohnMiltononcesaid,“Agoodbookisthepreciouslife-bloodofamasterspirit,embalmedandtreasureduponpurposetoalifebeyondlife.

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谁来帮我看下这篇英语文章(短篇滴`)有没有语病``?
Good morning,everybody!
A great man named John Milton once said,“A good book is the precious life-blood
of a master spirit,embalmed and treasured
up on purpose to a life beyond life.”
I love books.I love adventure books because I like to meet new challenges.I love detective or mystery books because I want to learn to solve problems or mysteries.
If I have a little money,I would buy books.That’ me!
Boys and girls,let’s love books because they make us so smart.
Bye!

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不知道你是几年级的学生,错误有一些,只是个人意见：
1 John Milton说的话完全看不明白是什么意思,如果这句话很出名,希望你能查到原句,否则的话就不写.在英语写作中最忌讳的就是翻译名人名言,因为经过英译汉和汉译英的二次翻译,所以会闹出很多笑话.
2 I love adventure books because I'd like to meet new challenges.
3 I love detective and mystery books because I want to learn how to solve problems.
4 If I have pocket money（零花钱）,I will save it to buy my favorate books.
5 That is me!Book is very important in my life.
6 Boys and girls,please love books because they bring us knowledge and make us smart.
Thankyou!Bye!
不知道你的这段话是不是要在课堂上说,如果是这样还不错,如果是要写作文,一定要注意尽量少用“I ...”这样的句式.