请帮我检查英语书面表达里的错误,全班同学去了公园,根据下面的提示写一则日记.天气是晴朗的,活动包括上午爬山,钓鱼,划船,中午吃自带食物,下午放风筝,打排球,做游戏.感受,很累,但很高兴

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请帮我检查英语书面表达里的错误,
全班同学去了公园,根据下面的提示写一则日记.天气是晴朗的,活动包括上午爬山,钓鱼,划船,中午吃自带食物,下午放风筝,打排球,做游戏.感受,很累,但很高兴.
Today,our classmate went to the park.The weather was sunny.
In the morning we went to the hill.
The hill was not tall.And we although go fishing and boating.
In the afternoon,I felt hungry ,so I aet some food ,the food tasted so well.
I and my good friends were play the tennis,someone was play games.
Another were fly kit.
today was fantastic,I felt terrible but happy.

Answer 1

一般不说The weather was sunny. 直接it 代替.It was sunny. 或 The weather was good.
went to the hill体现不出爬,we climbed the hill.
although表达转折,这里应该是“也”,所以换 also
过去的事态一致,把go fishing改 went fishing
第一人称一般放最后,I and my good friends 换My good friends and I
我想你是要表达一些人,另一些人吧.someone 改 some, Another 改 others
一般过去进行时态,were play 改 were playing, 同理 was play 改 were playing, were fly 改 were flying
kit? ---> kite
terrible是表达惊恐、糟糕的情况,换tired.