问问这句英语写的对不对求专业求指导还有更好地表达也可以说说TherewasadreaminmyinnocentchildhoodthatifonlyIhadhadafriendlikeitwhocanhelpmeachievemydesireandsharehappinessandpainwithme.

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问问这句英语写的对不对 求专业求指导 还有更好地表达 也可以说说
There was a dream in my innocent childhood that if only I had had a friend like it who can help me achieve my desire and share happiness and pain with me.

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if only不是这样用的,用在虚拟语气,但是你解释你的梦想如何可以直接陈述.desire不跟achieve搭配.你可以看看下面我稍作改动的:
There was a dream in my innocent childhood that i could have a friend, who can help me realize my desire as well as share my happiness and pain.
或If only i had had a friend, who can help me realize my desire as well as share my happiness and pain.