帮我改改我的英语作文吧（高中）谁能帮我修改我的作文,老师说我错了好多,可是我要是能找的出来就不会错了,它的题目是“为什么越来越多的城市人愿意去乡村度过周末.而乡村人却越来越

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帮我改改我的英语作文吧（高中）
谁能帮我修改我的作文,老师说我错了好多,可是我要是能找的出来就不会错了,
它的题目是“为什么越来越多的城市人愿意去乡村度过周末.而乡村人却越来越愿意来城市度过周末”100词左右
Nowadays ,with the development of society,an increasing number of people living in the city tend to have a weekend in the countryside.They drive cars to the countryside from the city for fishing、hiking during their weekend.They claim that the fresh air is of great benefit to their health.In addition they can enjoy the beautiful view of the countryside.They can relax themselves as well.
On the contrary,the people living in the countryside are likely to take the buses to the city for shopping or watching movies so that they can improve their life.
In the case of me,I think ,although the city would be able to a lot of convinced,but it be admitted that,city has more air with polluted and more noise,when compared with the countryside.Therefore,I prefer to go to the countryside during my weekend.

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前面的语言错误倒没有,但是比较啰嗦,我改后面的吧：
On the contrary, the people living in the countryside are likely to take the buses to the city for shopping or watching movies so that they can improve their life.
1、take the buses 没有这种用法,改为take a bus/take the bus
2、shop在这里不能直接用作动词,so that用的也不好,改为：
On the contrary, the people living in the countryside are likely to take the bus to the city to go shopping or watch movies to improve their life.
In the case of me, I think , although the city would be able to a lot of convinced, but it be admitted that, city has more air with polluted and more noise, when compared with the countryside.
机译的? 原因不说了,改给你看：
In the case of me,although the city provides a lot of convenience, it‘s more polluted and more noisy, compared with the countryside.
最后一句to go to 都是多余的