请英语高手指出语法上的错误!如果拿去演讲,2—3分钟左右能演讲完吗?原文：很高兴见到你们!我叫夏子胭,今年12岁,我来自贵州贵阳.我家有三口人,我的爸爸、我的妈妈和我,我的爸爸是一名工

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请英语高手指出语法上的错误!如果拿去演讲,2—3分钟左右能演讲完吗?
原文：很高兴见到你们!我叫夏子胭,今年12岁,我来自贵州贵阳.我家有三口人,我的爸爸、我的妈妈和我,我的爸爸是一名工程师,我的妈妈是一名列车员,我爱我的家庭!我比较粗心,但我一定会改正它的!我非常喜欢看电视和玩电脑游戏,但是我非常不喜欢出去运动.我最喜欢听《春之声圆舞曲》这首曲子,它很动听!我最喜欢的电影是《尖峰时刻2》,它非常有趣!我的演讲结束了,
翻译：Hello!Nice to see you!My name is XiaZi Yan this year,12 years old,I'm from guizhou guiyang.There are three people in my family,my father,my mother and me,my father is an engineer,and my mother is a conductor,I love my family!I'm more careless,but I will correct it.I like watching TV and playing computer games,but I really don't like to go out movement.I most like to listen to the sound of \"spring waltz\" this tune,it's beautiful!My favorite movie is \"rush hour 2\",it is very interesting!My speech is over,thank you!

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Hello!后面加上everyone .
My name is XiaZi Yan this year 12 years old 也不好
I'm from guizhou guiyang.不好,外国人地点从小到大, 你直接说i‘m from guiyang
I'm more careless,改为 i‘m careless maybe i can not pay close attention to do somethings .
but I will correct it. 改为i will overcome it
don't like to go out movement.改为do mot like do exercise .
I most like to listen to the sound of \"spring waltz\" this tune, it's beautiful! 改为 spring waltz is my favorite composition it is glorious .
it is very interesting! 文章简单词语太多了,如果要亮点这句改为 it is to die for .
thank you! 改为thank you for your time .
楼主翻译器翻译的!