求助帮忙批改一篇英语作文Iamverycoldinthatbigwind.Iamachinesegirl,igototheretoprotectwildanimals.Theyaresobeatiufulandprecious,butsomanypeoplehurtthefortheirfur.Icannotwatchthembekilled.soicomehere

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求助帮忙批改一篇英语作文
I am very cold in that big wind.I am a chinese girl,i go to there to protect wild animals.They are so beatiuful and precious ,but so many people hurt the for their fur.I can not watch them be killed.so i come here .Maybe i am very small,however,i want to help them.They are so valueness .I think we should take care of them .I hope more and more people will realize it is so important to protect wild animals.We can set up the nature Reserves for them and the goverment should take actions .

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第一行,went there
第二行,watch them to be killed
第三行,so I came here; 后面动词都改成过去式
初一或者初二的水平吧,除时态外还算可以.