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My experiences on New Year's Day
New Year is the best important thing for Chinese.
On this New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visit my grandparents.My grandparents live in a small villageand the sight is different from the city.During the stay in my grandparents' house,I did lots of things.But there is something makes me very happy .Let me show you about them!
In the evening of New Year's Day,my grandpa lit up a fire!The fire was very light,very strong and very warm!We all stood beside the fire and we felt very happy.
After that,we were all tired and hungry.So we go back to the room.To our surprise,there were many plates of dumplings on the table.They were made by my grandma.They are delicious and we eat them happily!
What a nice day!Although the day is pass,it will always be missed by me!

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My experiences on New Year's Day
New Year is the best important 【最重要-most important 】thing【事件-event】 for Chinese.
On this New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visit【过去式-visited】 my grandparents.My grandparents live in a small village and the sight 【风景-scenery,sight表示视野,加一个there】is different from the city.During the stay in my grandparents' house,I did lots of things.But there is something makes me very happy .【转折关系不对...用and更好~】Let me show you about them!
In the evening of New Year's Day,my grandpa lit up a fire!The fire was very light【明亮的 用bright 更好】,very strong and very warm!We all stood beside the fire and we felt very happy.
After that,we were all tired and hungry.So we go back to the room.To our surprise,there were many plates of dumplings on the table.They were made by my grandma.They are delicious and we eat【过去式-ate】 them happily!
What a nice day!Although the day is pass【已经结束要用现在完成时has passed】,it will always be missed by me!【这句话没必要用被动,改 I will always remember it】