请大家帮我修改一下这些英语表述!请大家帮我改改,写的很散.请大家指出其中的语法错误、用词不当、表述不清等等的地方,告诉我怎么改,谢谢!1.Whydoyouchoosetostudyatourinstitute?Therearesever

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请大家帮我修改一下这些英语表述!
请大家帮我改改,写的很散.请大家指出其中的语法错误、用词不当、表述不清等等的地方,告诉我怎么改,谢谢!
1.Why do you choose to study at our institute?
There are several reasons.
First,I strongly want to study further because after four years’ work,I felt that my knowledge has been old and not enough any more,I must keep on studing to adapt to the need of society.So I decide to take part in the Entrance Examanation of Postgraduate.
Second,Beijing Language and Culture University is very good.She has nice campus circumstance, many high-level postgraduate tutors and many significant research tasks. All these aspects attract me to enter the university to further study.I believe I can improve myself very much after three years’ study.
Thirdly, I learnt a lot from my job during the past four years. However, I think further study is still urgent for me to realize self-value. Life is precious. It is necessary to seize any chance for self-development, especially in this competitive modern world. In a word, I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’ study here.
2.Why do you want to go back to study instead of going on with your work?
I learnt a lot from my job during the past four years. But my foundation is still fairly weak, and if I don’t enhance myself by further studying now, I will must lag behind the society in later work. So, I think further study is urgent for me. Life is precious. It is necessary to seize any chance for self-development, especially in this competitive modern world. In a word, I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’ study here.
3.What do you expect to achieve during your study if you are enrolled into this institute?
If I’m so lucily to be enrolled into Beijing Language and Culture University,I will cherish the study chance very much.My plan is: First, I hope I can form systematic view of Classical Chinese Literature. My express wish is to get a complete comprehension of the formation and development of the subject. If possible, I will go on with my study for doctorate degree.As for English study,I will pay more attention to my oral English,I will communicate with foreign friends to improve my English ability.I will try to learn decent English.
chinglish enough.
回答者：北12溶液 - 童生 一级 4-17 15:01

是啊是啊，所以想让大家给改的不那么chinglish点啊
请问：chinglish是啥意思？
回答者：Wendylove春 - 秀才 三级 4-17 15:11

chinese+english=chinglish,中国化英语

Answer 1

第一句Why do you choose our institute?就可以了,不用加study.
First,I strongly want to have a further study because after four years’ work,I realize that my knowledge is out of the time and not available for daily work.I must keep on studying to adapt the present society.So I decide to attend the Entrance Examanation of Postgraduate.
Second,in my opinion,Beijing Language and Culture University is good.She has nice campus ,many high-level postgraduate tutors and many significant research tasks.All these aspects attract me to enter the university for further study.I believe I can greatly improve myself after three years’ study.
Thirdly,I learnt a lot from my job during the past four years.However,I think further study is still urgent for me to discover the self-value.Life is precious.It is necessary to cherish every chance for self-development,especially in this competitive modern world.In a word,I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’ study here.
2.Why do you want to study in university instead of going on working?
I learnt a lot from my job during the past four years.But my foundation is not steady,and if I don’t improve myself by further studying now,I will fall behind in the future work.Therefore,I think further study is urgent for me.Life is precious.It is necessary to cherish every chance for self-development,especially in this competitive modern world.In a word,I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’ study here.
3.Do you have any future plans of the achivements during your study if you are enrolled into this institute?
If I’m so luckily to be enrolled into Beijing Language and Culture University,I will cherish the chance .My plan is:First,I hope I can form systematic view of Classical Chinese Literature.My express wish is to get a complete comprehension of the formation and development of the subject.If possible,I will go on with my study for doctor's degree.As for English study,I will pay more attention to my oral English.I will communicate with foreign friends to improve my English .最后这句I will try to learn decent English.我认为去掉较好.很有中国人说话的味道,其实之前你已经表达的很清楚了.
基本就是这样了,改了一些,不知道是不是违了你原来的意思,请仔细看一下.