求英语帝帮我看看这样写对不对啊我妈出国要用我英文也不太好DearOfficer,HerewithweconfirmthatMshuaxinhuibelongstoShanghaiwanzongintherealestatebrokerageco.,LTD.Herworkingperiodis0.5years.Weapprove

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求英语帝 帮我看看这样写对不对啊 我妈出国要用 我英文也不太好
Dear Officer,
Herewith we confirm that Ms huaxinhui belongs to Shanghai wan zong in the real estate brokerage co., LTD . Her working period is 0.5 years. We approved her trip to UK and European countries during her holiday from On May 14, 2013-2013 on May 21. All the cost and accommodations will be paid by herself. His information is as below:
Name: huaxinghui Passport No.:G40962741 Date of Birth: On October 23 ,
Position: clerk Salary: 3500 yuan/month

We hereby formally guarantee that she will abide by all outbound laws and regulations and will come back to China on time, we will reserve her position after his returning.

特别是名字 要不要大小写 或者姓和名的顺序 还有其他公司名称的写法 语法什么的 帮我检查一下谢谢了
还有2013年5月14到2013年5月21号那个地方 是这样写吗

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是旅行签证的在职信?简单清晰就好,看的人不会仔细的,只是重要的地方写清楚.
名字开头字大写,姓在前面,名在后面,例如,刘德华( Liu Dehua)
语法不必担心,这信不是英文考试.是提供信息.
没有人会关心语法.
公司名称:Shanghai wan zong in the real estate brokerage co.,LTD把中文贴下,我来改.
2013年5月14到2013年5月21号:Feom14th May 2013 to 21st May 2013