这句英文有没有错误SavingtimeandmoneyfortheconsumerbyhelpingtokeepfoodfreshhasalwaysbeenoneofTupperware'smostimportantgoals.如题,如果有语法上等错误请在原句意思不变的基础上帮忙改下,

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这句英文有没有错误
Saving time and money for the consumer by helping to keep food fresh has always been one of Tupperware's most important goals.
如题,如果有语法上等错误 请在原句意思不变的基础上帮忙改下,

Answer 1

consumer没有说不对,只是选词并不好,你不是以比如官方,报纸,记者等第三方的口气来说话,当然不要直接称消费者,如果要以公司的口吻来说,为.服务是我们的主要目标,当然要说我们的“顾客”.
主语太长不容易阅读和理解,用形式主语代替下更好
it has always been one of Tupperware's most important goals to save time and money for our customers by helping them to keep their food fresh.