跪谢啊...改完还有加分Someparentsthinkthattheirchildshouldbeallowedtousecellphones,formobilephonesarenotentirelyharmful.Tobeginwith,parentscaneasilykeepintouchwiththeirchildbycellphones.Meanwhile,ifchildhaves

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跪谢啊...改完还有加分
Some parents think that their child should be allowed to use cell phones,for mobile phones are not entirely harmful.To begin with,parents can easily keep in touch with their child by cell phones.Meanwhile,if child have some emergency situations,they also can tell their family quickly.Besides,a smart phone have a great number of applications such as electronic dictionary,electronic book and surfing internet.Students also can use these application to improve their learning efficiency.
Nevertheless,there are more reasons to support that instructor have the right to ban moble phones.Above all,using cell phones can distract student’s study.Most student play their cell phones during class rather than listening class,and they are also cheating in their exams with mobile phones.That is very serious problem.Moreover,the radiation of call phone is huge is issue to children,and it can affect teenager health seriously.According to recent reports,radiation can cause DNA damage because the defensive of teenagers is very low.Especially,long-term exposure would influence mental function and improve chances to get kinds of cancer and other diseases.So we should make students be away from cell phones.

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Some parents think that their child should be allowed to use cell phones,for mobile phones are not entirely harmful.To begin with,parents can easily keep in touch with their 【child改为children 】by cell phones.Meanwhile,if【child改为children 】have some emergency situations,they 【also can 改为can also】tell their family quickly.Besides,a smart phone have a great number of applications such as electronic dictionary,electronic book and surfing internet.Students also can use these 【application加s 】to improve their learning efficiency.
Nevertheless,there are more reasons to support that instructor have the right to ban moble phones.Above all,using cell phones can distract student’s study.Most 【student加s】 play their cell phones during class 【rather than listening短语前后的动词形式不一样把 listening 改为listen】class,and they are also cheating in their exams with mobile phones.【That改为which 因为that不能引导非限制定语从句】 is very serious problem.Moreover,the radiation of call phone is huge【 is去掉 】issue to children,and it can affect 【teenager加[s`]年轻人的】 health seriously.According to recent 【reports去掉s】,radiation can cause DNA damage because the defensive of teenagers is very low.Especially,long-term exposure would influence mental function and improve chances to get kinds of 【cancer加s 】and other diseases.So we should【 make 改为keep因为keep sb away from sth】students 【be 去掉be 】away from cell phones.