短文改错,要准确率高的!老师明天可是要批阅的!DearJack,I’mmorethanshockedthatyou’resmokinginthisphoto.Youdidn’tlookcoolatallwithacigaretteinthemouth.Asisknowntoallisthatsmokingdoesgreatharmstoou

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短文改错,要准确率高的!老师明天可是要批阅的!
Dear Jack,
I’m more than shocked that you’re smoking in this photo.You didn’t look cool at all with a cigarette in the mouth.As is known to all is that smoking does great harms to our lungs,our heart and our brain as well.You will feel tiring out soon.And you’ll find hard to play football with your friends again.What’s worse,once used with it,it’s very difficult to quit.I strongly suggest you should give it up until it’s too late.Firstly,try to quit it gradually so that you won’t feel so badly.Secondly,be determined never not to start smoking again.Thirdly,try to make yourself interesting in other things,like sports.
Yours
Li Hua

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Dear Jack,
I’m more than shocked that you were smoking in this photo. You didn’t look cool at all with a cigarette in the mouth. As is known to all,smoking does great harm to our lungs, our heart and our brain as well. You will feel tired soon. And you’ll find it hard to play football with your friends again. What’s worse, once used to it, it’s very difficult to quit it. I strongly suggest that you should give it up before it’s too late. Firstly, try to quit it gradually so that you won’t feel so bad. Secondly, be determined not to start to smoke again. Thirdly, try to make yourself interested in other things, like sports.
Yours
Li Hua

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