点评一下英语演讲稿我要参加英语演讲比赛,稿子自己写,写了一些,很短,想再写一些,可是就是没有词汇了.请懂英语的各位帮忙改改语法错误,最好能再加一些.不要求太高深太复杂的词汇.稿子

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点评一下英语演讲稿
我要参加英语演讲比赛,稿子自己写,写了一些,很短,想再写一些,可是就是没有词汇了.
请懂英语的各位帮忙改改语法错误,最好能再加一些.不要求太高深太复杂的词汇.
稿子如下：
As we can see,in recent years,the world has been developed quickly.People use modern machines and go to work by car.Many tall buildings are built and the streets become very busy,but at the same time,environment pollution has become heavier and heavier.Water pollution makes the rivers and lakes dirty,noise pollution makes us talk louder and louder and air pollution affects all living things in the world.The sky becomes gray,because the smog is so thick that it is like a quilt over the cities; fishes can’t live in the rivers because of the dirty water.So we must do something to fight pollution.
Though I can’t clean the whole river or keep dirty smoke out of the air,I can do many other things.Just like go to school by bus and don’t throw rubbish on the ground and so on.If I can do it,you can do it,too.If everyone helps to fight pollution,there will be less pollution and the world will be more bueatiful.
最后一个单词打错了，这我知道，基本格式我也是知道的，自己会加，我现在求的是对主体内容的点评并且希望能加一些句子~

Answer 1

其他的先不用看 格式上 开头要有对观众的尊称 F E :lidies and gentleman