再帮我检查一下,VVIntroducemyselfMynameisZhaoJingGe.MyEnglishnameisCandy.Ihavelongblackhair,andapairofbrowneyes.Ilikereadbooks,drawpicturesanddance.Ilikesports,everysubjectandtoo!SpecialinEnglish.Inmylife,most

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再帮我检查一下,VV
Introduce myself
My name is Zhao Jing Ge.My English name is Candy.I have long black hair,and a pair of brown eyes.I like read books,draw pictures and dance.I like sports,every subject and too!Special in English.In my life,most hard time in my primary school graduate holiday.I went to skating rink learn skating.But I learn it too bed.Because I am not good at equipoise.Fall,again and again .Up,again and again.Again,fall,again up.Coach drop on,don’t be afraid.Trauma,don’t be afraid.My skating skills were accumulated in tumbles and tears.Get cross this thing,I know:if I have backbone,no matter what,I can do good.Why I choice software and hardware was very good Xi Cheng English junior school read in this school for three year?Because I know Western city where the pursuit of a foreign language school is the overall development of students,while highlighting psychological quality education,modern information technology education,foreign language education in the three major characteristics.High standards and characteristics,the overall quality of education open to students by continually raising the quality.I believe that I will be trained very outstanding in your esteem school for the later three years.

Answer 1

like 后面的动词用ing形式
“I like sports,every subject and too!Special in English”
是不是想说 I like sports and also some other subjects,especilly English.
"In my life,most hard time in my primary school graduate holiday." -----the holiday when I graduated from primary school is the hard time.
I went to skating rink learn skating------I went to the skating rink to learn skating
But I learn it too bed------I learned not so well.
后面的我直接写了,你对比着看吧~
because my equipoise is not so good.I got down again and again and stood up time after time.From this expirence I understood that only if I keep going there is nothing I cannot do.why did I choose Xi Cheng English junior school Because I know it is the school which the way of its foreign language teaching is good for the development of students.
.during the 3 years .