三句英语自我介绍求修改!Dearinterviewers,mynameisXXX.IcomefromXX.MyBachelordegreeinEngineeringManagementwouldbeearnedin6.2015andIhopeIcancontinuemyMaster’sdegreeinthesamemajorthroughtheexchangeprogram.尊

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三句英语自我介绍求修改!
Dear interviewers,my name is XXX.I come from XX.My Bachelor degree in Engineering Management would be earned in 6.2015 and I hope I can continue my Master’s degree in the same major through the exchange program.
尊敬的面试官,我叫XXX.我来自XX.2015年6月我将获得我工程管理的本科学位,同时我希望我能通过这个交流项目继续在同一研究方向学习我的研究生课程.
修改过后的：Dear madem/sir,my name is
XXX.I am from Nanjing.My major is XX and I will get
the bachelor’s degree in Jun,2015.After that,I hope I could continue my master’s
degree in the same major through the exchange program.

Answer 1

感觉就是最后一个句子,写的和翻译的意思不一样啊,你写的英语的意思是
“我希望能我在同一个专业继续我的硕士学位”,有点说不通.还有就是Bachelor后面加‘s应该是忘了写吧.