托福作文求评分.TPO9的独立作文.综合作文,Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Technologyhasmadechildrenlesscreativethantheywereinthepast.Usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.作文如下

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托福作文求评分.TPO9的独立作文.
综合作文,
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
作文如下：
Some ,firmly holding the viewpoint that the creativity and the imagination of the kids decline with the appearance of TVs ,magazines ,computers and other modern technologies ,are on the same side with me .The newly-invented technologies apparently prevent the children from positive thinking and creative works instead rise to be a passive information acceptor.The first reason ,easy to acquire ,is the inability to activating the brain thinking .Exposed to the information explosion and the ease provided by the information searching engines ,the kids always won't think for themselves when confronted with any difficulties .Just take one of my brothers for an instance ,his teacher assigned him to write an essay on the animals' defensive behaviors with the help of a compulsory book ,he just put that book away and logged on the internet ,pasted the information without even a meticulous reading .Additionally ,as I want to state,modern technology like TVs ,magazines ,electronic books foster the teens to be a thorough passive acceptor .That's to say ,there always being no considerable thoughts wondering wether it's true or not ,the teenagers adapt to the backgrounds and the viewpoints that are cast in the TVs or magazines and so on .The phenomenon that young girls cannot stop reading the pink bubble love stories ,ignoring the possibility that a prince falls in love with an ugly girl only for her kind heart ,strongly champions the point .And the last reason I want to maintain is that as young teens spend so much time on the internet chatting ,playing games ,watching movies ,they lose the chances to do other creative works like writing poetry ,drawing pictures ,sculpting a stone and so many jobs that motivate the kids' brain storm.All in all ,the modern technologies do decrease the motivation of creativity at the consequence of being exposed to so much information ,growing into a passive acceptor and lack of time to do creative jobs .
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理由有点差不多,后两个没有论据（就是例子）.还有,语言不太地道,如one of my brothers可以直接说my brother ＋人名.分数我不好说,不过我考试都是GOOD,一定要有例子,格式相似没关系,例子最重要.关于今昔对比文章,从“科技的发展,环境的污染,观念的扭转,福利的完善”四方面考虑.论点既是：1.孩子观念改变（不用creative,因为有科技）,2..3..