高手帮看有没有语法/单词错误Ihavemanyhobbies,suchasreading,skating,andwatchingTV.Butreadingismyfavoritehobby.Ilikereadingforthreereasons.Firstofall,booksintroducemetoanewworld,whichiscolourfulandwithouttime

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高手帮看有没有语法/单词错误
I have many hobbies,such as reading,skating,and watching TV.But reading is my favorite hobby.I like reading for three reasons.First of all,books introduce me to a new world,which is colourful and without time and space limit,Through reading,I can trace back.to ancient Egypt,the cradle of human civilization.It can bring myself to the United states,a glamorous land I have been longing to visit.Secondly,reading can better myself by showing me a new horizon.In the past years,most of my knowledge has been obtained from books.I have learned from many people by reading about their ideas on scithee,politics,life and society.Thirdly,reading bridge the gap between my dream and my goal.In ordcr to succeed in my career in the future,I must keep reading,thinking and practising.Reading has become part of my life.Every day,I spend some time reading books,newspapcrs and magazines.At night,I can hardly go to steep without a novel in my hand.

Answer 1

有些小地方要修改：
1. 第二行which is colourful and without time...中的and 应该去掉.
2. 第三行limit 和Through reading之间是句号, i can trace back to中间没有句号,这些都是笔误吧：）
3. 第四行主题It指代不明,上句的主语是I,这句主语是reading,就不能用it,而要写reading.最好写Reading can also bring me to... 句与句衔接用转承词.而且注意这里用me,而不是myself.
4.第四行i have been longed to visit.
5.第五行secondly...那句没看懂,估计better是其他单词吧
6.第七行idea on science...reading bridges (单数形式)the gap..
7.第八行in order to
8.第九行i spend many time on (少介词)reading books, newspaper(不可数名词)
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