请帮我看一下这个英语短文有语法错误吗,Furthertoourpreviousstaffmeeting,Iampleasedtoconfirmallstaffthatparentalleaveforfathershasbeenextendedtothreeweeks.Thenewsystemwillcomeintooperationasstartfrom25th

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请帮我看一下这个英语短文有语法错误吗,
Further to our previous staff meeting,I am pleased to confirm all staff that parental leave for fathers has been extended to three weeks.The new system will come into operation as start from 25th September .Remember to tell managers before a month about leave.

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all staff 、start 多余.
before a month about leave改为a month before leave.