谁能帮我改一下这篇英文(语法),Firstly,introductionincludestwoparts,whatistraditionalbuildingandtheimportanceofprotectingtraditionalbuilding.Traditionalbuildingsarethosebuildingswhichexperiencedlongparticularperiodan

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谁能帮我改一下这篇英文(语法),
Firstly,introduction includes two parts,what is traditional building and the importance of protecting traditional building.Traditional buildings are those buildings which experienced long particular period and possessing historical significance.We should protect them because all traditional buildings symbolize their own national spirit,they also reflect the style of structure in that time.The purpose of these two parts is to introduce the concept of traditional building and declare our standpoint.
Next part is the body of presentation,it also consisted of two parts,a good example and a bad example,which indicate there would be two different results of opposite attitude toward traditional building in this section.The case of bad example is a phenomenon of destroying Quadrangle in China.For preparing Olympic Games,government has to find more available space,so they destroyed most Quadrangles,it also bring the loss on follows aspects,they include but not limited,culture,education and finance.As similarly,we would afford a good instance which focus on the same aspects as the bad example,but advantages.It is the protection of The Tower of Pisa in Italy.This instance includes that government in Italy gets benefit (finance income) from protecting traditional building by tour,it teach us that one way to avoid traditional buildings conflict to its local developing is to change their original functions.These two examples are used to make auditions notice the difference if people protect the traditional building and also prove why we should protect traditional building,not destroy them.
The main purpose of last section is to tell people what people should do against traditional building and summarize the whole presentation.What should people do if they want to preserve those traditional buildings?First at all,we need to change its original function then we need to organize a strong organization to maintain and manage them and a suitable urban planning.In conclusion,the reason of why we need to protect traditional building is we must preserve our culture; it is a rare landmark of history which is also the main purpose of our presentation.

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楼主的文章在定冠词（a / the / -s) 方面有很多小失误,所以以后要加强这方面的练习.
Firstly,the introduction includes two parts,what a traditional building is and the importance of protecting traditional buildings.Traditional buildings are those buildings which have experienced a long particular period of time and possess historical significances.We should protect them because all traditional buildings symbolize their own national spirits,and also reflect the style of structure at that time.The purpose of these two parts is to introduce the concept of traditional building and to declare our standpoint.
The next part is the body of the presentation,it also consists of two parts,a good example and a bad example,which indicate there would be two different results from the opposite attitudes toward traditional buildings in this section.The case of bad example is a phenomenon of destroying Quadrangle in China.For the preparation of the Olympic Games,the government had to find more available spaces,so they destroyed most Quadrangles,which brought a loss on other aspects,including but not limited in,culture,education and finance.
As similarly,we would use a good instance to show advatages from on the same aspects as from the bad example.It is the protection of The Tower of Pisa in Italy.This instance includes that the government in Italy gets benefits (finance income) from protecting the traditional building from touring.It teaches us that one way to avoid conflictions between traditional buildings and local development is to change their original functions.These two examples are used to make people realize the differences,and also prove why we should protect traditional buildings,not destroy them.
The main purpose of the last section is to tell people what people should do for traditional buildings and to summarize the whole presentation.What should people do if they want to preserve those traditional buildings?First at all,we need to change its original functions then we need to form a strong organization to maintain and manage them with a suitable urban plan.In conclusion,the reason of why we need to protect traditional buildings is we must preserve our culture; they are rare landmarks of history which are also the main purpose of our presentation.