你能不能再帮我看一段我写的文章?Ilistentomusicveryoften,andittransformedmyboringlifeintoalifefullofexcitementandhappiness.Istartedtolistentomusicinfourthgrade,becausebackthenallthepopularstudentsinmysc

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你能不能再帮我看一段我写的文章?
I listen to music very often,and it transformed my boring life into a life full of excitement and happiness.I started to listen to music in fourth grade,because back then all the popular students in my school listen to music; I was just trying to fit in.However,when I got into middle school,music starts to play significant roles in my life.Gradually,I understand the meaning of the song lyrics and am often inspired by them.A sorrowful song moves me to tears while a joyous song light up my mood.Music is essential to me especially when I am in a gloomy mood,for its beautiful melody washes away my sorrow and fills me with hope and energy
然后帮我改改错?
not much problem?
then what is the problem?

Answer 1

一些时态没用对,但这些都是小错误,总的来说写得很不错了.
started TO LISTEN to music in fourth grade:started listening to ...
all the popular students in my school LISTEN to music:listened
music STARTS to play SIGNIFICANT ROLES in my life:started,a significant role