高分求改错,括号中的部分为错误请改正并说明错因（如:主谓不一致,时态错误,固定搭配错误等）Firstly,technologiesextricatepeoplefromtiringandcomplicatedwork,suchas.此处省略...(Insum),technologiesrem

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高分求改错,括号中的部分为错误 请改正并说明错因 （如:主谓不一致,时态错误,固定搭配错误等）
Firstly,technologies extricate people from tiring and complicated work,such as.此处省略...
( In sum) ,technologies remove the heavy burden on people`sshoulders.
(Secondly),modern (techs) boost the development of medical science and offer patientsbetter treatment.We also have a variety of innovative medical devices like CT/ MRI (scanner) and ultrasonic could help doctors to diagnose （the disease of people）,and prevent people （suffering from）their health issues.It is (hardly) to imagine a worldwithout modern medical technology.
(Thirdly),some educational technologies like remotecurriculum and online (library) provide priceless resources andopportunities to common people.Right now,we could share the open courses fromthe world-class universities like Harvard or Stanford to expand our horizon andenhance our knowledge.It also gives people who cannot afford education an alternative study option.
Eventually,modern technologyeven promotes the construction of the legal system.For instance,in the pastfew years,Chinese people （do not have） an effective way to report corruptofficials.However,numerous greedy officials have been reported by cybercitizens （these days）.Similarly,in India,there are some websites like‘I paid a bribe’ were established to prevent and（ hit corrupt）
Insum,despite (of) the (demerits) of modern-(tech),I am fully convincedthat we could still benefit from it,as long as we try to minimize the defectsof it.

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Firstly,technologies extricate people from tiring and complicated work,such as.此处省略...
【 In sum这个一般放文章末段】 ,technologies remove the heavy burden on people`s shoulders.
【Secondly其次】,modern 【techs此为形容词,需改成 technology】 boost the development of medical science and offer patients better treatment【建议加s 要不就前面变成 a better treatment】.We also have a variety of innovative medical devices like CT/ MRI 【scanner前面是技术,应该要加这个单词才对,不过要加s】and ultrasonic 【加which 引导句子修饰innovative medical devices】could help doctors to diagnose （the disease of people【改成diseases 】）,and prevent people （suffering from【from suffering】）their health issues.It is (hardly)【改成hard】 to imagine a world without modern medical technology.【整句建议,we can hardly imagine a world without modern medical technology】
【Thirdly这个没错吧】,some educational technologies like remote curriculum and online (library改成libraries) provide priceless resources and opportunities to common people.Right now,we could 【这里是能够的意思,可以直接用can】share the open courses from【似乎要改成of】the world-class universities like Harvard or Stanford to expand 【expand倾向于领地方面,改成broaden】our horizon and enhance【enhance更多是增强的意思,最好能改成enrich】 our knowledge.It also gives people who cannot afford education an alternative study option【alternative 本身也有选择的意思,建议改成an alternative in study,也可不改】.
Eventually,modern technology even promotes the construction of the legal system.For instance,in the past few years,Chinese people 【do not have改成didnot have 几年前用过去时】 an effective way to report corruptofficials.However,numerous greedy officials have been reported by cybercitizens 【these days完成时须有限定词,改成on these days】.Similarly,in India,there are some websites like‘I paid a bribe’ were established to prevent and【 hit corrupt 用名词,改成corruption】
Insum,despite (of【in spite of 和 despite 别误用了】the【demerits一般指人的过失,建议改成disadvantages 或者mistakes】of 【modern-tech改成modern technology】,I am fully convinced that we could still benefit from it,as long as we try to minimize the defectsof it.