英语自然段怎么继续写下去Firstly,apersonwhogrowsinaimmigrationfamilywhichdoesnotspeaklocallanguagehastolearnlocallanguageoutsidehis/herfamily.MyfriendStephenisaconcreteexample,hisparentsarefromChinaandthey

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英语自然段 怎么继续写下去
Firstly,a person who grows in a immigration family which does not speak local language has to learn local language outside his/her family.My friend Stephen is a concrete example,his parents are from China and they barely speak English at home.Nevertheless,Stephen is still pretty good at English because he listens and speaks English among his friends everyday.

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首先,文章还行,只要留意一下句子结构就行了.
First,a person who grows in an(不是a) immigration family which does not speak a(缺冠词) local language has to learn this language outside his/her family.（我觉得跟着这个中心句,你要加点解释比较好,比如在家为什么学不了英语之类--像 缺少口语练习==）.My friend Stephen is a concrete example.(分开两句)His parents are from China ,and they barely speak English at home.Nevertheless,Stephen is still pretty good at English because he hears and speaks English among his friends everyday.（你在这后面可以加上一些他如何学习的）
For example,Stephen knows he doesn't have a good language environment to improve English.Therefore,he tries to make friends with different cultural background.When he communicates with his friends,he has to use his language skills to decribe.When time goes by,his English standard improves.
然后,我不太懂的是,你这篇文章到底要写什么.