求助高手帮我改作文FromthetablebasedonasurveywemadeofthespreadingconditionofAIDSonaglobalscale.Wecanfindthattheincidenceandspreadingrateofthisdiseasehasbeenanincreasesharplyatrecentyears.Asisshown

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From the table based on a survey we made of the spreading condition of AIDS on a global scale.We can find that the incidence and spreading rate of this disease has been an increase sharply at recent years.As is shown in the chart above,in 1990,it was less than 5000 people were infected; and in 1995,it was it increased to almost 20,000 people; while in 2000,the number soared to 50,000 people.
What cause this rapid change?There are mainly two reasons that account for that.Firstly,there are hasn’t an effective methods to cure this disease yet.Although medical stage hasn’t abandons their research,the effect was not so good.Besides,many people still lack an awareness of how to take care of themselves.The problem of drug abuse and moral standards depressing are becoming more and worse and worse.
In conclusion,the development of medical technologies and the raising of Self-protection awareness will prevent the condition from deteriorating.
看看语法和时态有没有明显错误,

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第二句最好改为has been increasing sharply.
第三句,in 1990. it was less than 5000 infected people.
in 1995, the number has increased to about 20,000 people.
下面那句in 2000,把最后面的people一词去掉.
下面那句改为what causes this rapid change?
下面那句把that account for it去掉.
Firstly, there are hasn’t an effective methods to cure this disease yet.
这一句中,有动词的错误,改为Firstly, there is still no effective method to cure this disease.
再下一句,the problem加s.
再下面那句,abandons改为abandoned
many people lack awareness of .而且后面应该是more and more worse.