英语作文求修改。请各位大侠帮忙啊题目：Nowadaysthewaymanypeopleinteractwitheachotherhaschangedbecauseoftechnology.Inwhatwayshastechnologyaffectedthetypesofrelationshipspeoplemake?Hasthisbecomeapositive

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英语作文求修改。请各位大侠帮忙啊
题目：Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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With the technology booms fast, communication is easier than before. People get used to talk through the phone instead visit each other for many times, which plays an important part in daily life.
I strongly reckon that technology become a positive development.
For example, if I study abroad and far away from my parents it’s obvious that we can’t live together every day. But we can meet on the Internet by QQ. We can also talk over the phone. So, this must be attribute to modern technology.
However, in the same situation, if don’t have QQ or even telephone, I believe that both parents and children be sad because of less communication.
We don’t fear how long distance between one person and another, and we also don’t fear communication skills are poor. Nowadays new techonlogy has changed this fear. It has been wide used in every part of the world.
Taking into account all these factors, we can make a conclusion that the technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talk or to interact at any time and anywhere in the world. Besides, people can also make new friends by this way to expand relationship circle and make life more convenient and joyful.

Answer 1

1.With the technology booms fast 改为 With the technology booming fast
2. People get used to talk through the phone改为People get used to talking through the phone
get used to doing sth 习惯做某事
3.instead visit each other for many times建议改为instead of visiting each other for many times.或者用rather than visit each other for many times. instead单独使用时，一般放在句尾，放中间时，要用逗号隔开，不过意思表示“反而”。表示“代替”时，一般是后者代替前者
We’ve no coffee. Would you like tea instead.我没有咖啡了，喝茶行吗？
She never studies. Instead, she plays tennis all day. 她成天打网球，而不是学习。
4.reckon that technology become a positive development.建议改为reckon that technology will have a positive development in the long run
5. if I study abroad and far away from my parents 缺少成分 if I study abroad and go far away from my parents
6.this must be attribute to modern technology 去掉be . attribute to 把.....归于
7. I believe that both parents and children be sad because of less communication. 建议改为I believe that both parents and children will be sad because of less communication 此处没有虚拟语气
8. we also don’t fear 改为We don't also fear
9.It has been wide 改为 It has been widely
10. Taking into account all these factors改为 Taking all these factors into account
take sth into account 把.....考虑在内 或者改为Taking account of all these factors也行
11.which help people to talk or to interact at any time and anywhere in the world. which 前面一定要有逗号，因为是非限制定语从句，help改为helps
问题不算太大，整体来说作文不错，多注意一点细节会更好，继续努力吧！
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