为什么这只有13分!HiPeter,Asyouareinterestedinthefreebicyclesysteminourcity,IdliketotellyouwhatIvelearnedaboutit.Asyouareaforeigner,soyoucanapplyfortheIDcardwithyourpassportandphotoes.Thecenterthattakes

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为什么这只有13分!
Hi Peter,
As you are interested in the free bicycle system in our city,I d like to tell you what I ve learned about it.
As you are a foreigner,so you can apply for the ID card with your passport and photoes.The center that takes responsibility for it lies in the southeastof Zhongshan Road in Wuchang.
The center opens at 8 o clock till 5 p.m.With the appplication limited,you had better get there early.After applying for it you can get the ID CARD which valids for three years where you appply for it.Much to your convenience,with a card in your hand you can have an access to the bikes at any stations around the city renting or returing it .

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先说一下,地球人都知道的改试卷的方法：开头差不多就决定你的作文属于第几等级了.
你的第一句实在是不敢恭维呀!
你的这个因果关系用的实在是让人很不舒服.因为你感兴趣,所以我告诉你一点事.
因为你是外国人,所以你能申请身份证.
下一句,干脆没有谓语动词,就是一个主语和that从句,这个……
从几点到几点：from to,这么明显的用法,您也错了.实在是语法错误连篇呀!文章思维很不符合基本逻辑.
还有,英语思维和中文恰恰相反,喜欢先说重要的事情,然后再说原因.
I'd like to tell sth about bike system of our city for happening to know that you are intersted in it.
It is necessary to apply the ID card with your passport and photoes.Then you can go to the center that 从句.然后介绍一下中心.