帮我改一下句子,1.Theactionofagovernmentfundartistsandmusicians,actually,isofdissipationtotaxpayer'smoney2.Itisaluxuriousdreamtothosekidslivinginpoverty-strichenareatogetasystemiceducation3.Netsurfingisacostlyh

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帮我改一下句子,
1.The action of a government fund artists and musicians,actually,is of dissipation to taxpayer's money
2.It is a luxurious dream to those kids living in poverty-strichen area to get a systemic education
3.Net surfing is a costly habit
4.Protecting edangered species needs a lot of public funding,which is heavy economic burden for developing counties.
5.Holding a olympic games could increases a government revenues,and creats more employment

Answer 1

基本语法和结构没大问题,主要是动词格式,单复数,错别字和用词不当.
1.The action of a government funding artists and musicians,actually,is of waste of taxpayers' money.
注：这里fund改为funding,因为意思是“action”,所以用动词的名称格比较恰当.dissipation这个词用的不合适,改为waste of更直接和干净.taxpayer在这里必须用复数,这个词的复数形式的所有格单引号要放在s之后.
2.It is a luxurious dream for those kids living in poverty-stricken areas to get systematic education.
注：这里”对于谁谁来说“用for比to好.poverty-stricken是正确的拼法.贫困地区要么用单数the poverty-stricken area/a poverty-stricken area,要么用复数,不能像原句那样.systematic是正确拼法.education一般是作为不可数名词来用,不要加"a".
3.Net surfing is a costly habit.没大问题,但最好改为internet surfing比较准确.
4.Protecting endangered species needs a lot of public funding,which is a heavy economic burden to developing countries.
注：endangered,countries拼写错误.“a burden to”是固定表达方式.
5.Holding the Olympic Games could increase a government revenue,and create employment.
注：The Olympic Games是一个固定专有名词,奥运会只有一个,没有“an Olympic Games”的说法.但你可以说“an Olympic game”(一场奥运赛事),an Olympic champion（一个奥运冠军）,大小写不能错.
can,could后面接动词原形,不能再用复数.这句的revenue没有必要用复数,但用了也不是原则错误.创造就业机会这个短语直接说create employment即可,用“more”也不是原则错误但属于中式英语的表达.