帮忙看下我写的一篇小短文看完电视卡通《辛普森一家》第二季第三集,觉得很有意思,请大家帮忙看看我写的这个小短文,挑挑语病,如果有感兴趣的,以后可以固定从我这拿分呵呵,我想多写几

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帮忙看下我写的一篇小短文
看完电视卡通《辛普森一家》第二季第三集,觉得很有意思,请大家帮忙看看我写的这个小短文,挑挑语病,如果有感兴趣的,以后可以固定从我这拿分呵呵,我想多写几个关于辛普森的练练.
The episode 3-"Bart got an F" is my favorite one among the season 2,I like Bart Simpson very much since I saw his cute and sincere personality,though a little naughty.
The topic of this story is Bart has failed his last four exam and his teacher suggested that he would better to repeat the forth grade,but Bart promised he would pass the last exam to which relate whether he could reach the next grade.
In this episode,there are lots of humorous scenes especially at the beginning,in order to escape the quiz,Bart pretend to have a stomachache and then he arrived at the infirmary.The awful nurse asked:"Do you have temporary loss of vision?"
"who said this,come closer!"Bart said.This made me laughed over and over.
But Bart is the Bart he was,he played and ignored the study all the same until the day before his crucial exam.He began to nervous about that and he prayed God to let something happend to avoid the test tomorrow.As a miracle,a blizzerd has precipitated in the midnight.All the Springfeild's school and plant closed.This storm made all people quite excited except Bart,because he konws the sonw was granted by God.He hit the books when people celebrited the Sonw Day outside his window.
At the end,Bart got a D minus and pass the exam.what a cheerful ending.Bart spit on the ground bucause he was too happy to control himself to celebrite his success by kissed the teacher's face,this made me laughed again.

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Episode 3-"Bart got an F" is my favorite episode of season 2.I started to like Bart Simpson very much since I saw his cute face and sincere personality,though a little naughty.
The episode is about that Bart failed his last four exams and his teacher suggested that he would be better off repeating forth grade.Bart promised to his teacher that he would pass the last exam which would determine whether he could move on to the next grade.
Throughout the episode,there are lots of humorous scenes,especially at the beginning when in order to escape the quiz,Bart pretended to have a stomachache and arrived at the infirmary.The awful nurse asked:"Do you have temporary loss of vision?"
"who said this,come closer!" said Bart.This made me laugh over and over.
But Bart is the Bart he was,he played and ignored the study all the same until the day before his crucial exam.He began to get nervous about it and he prayed to God for something to happend so that he could avoid the test the next day.As a miracle,a blizzard precipitated at midnight.All Springfeild's schools and plants closed.The storm made all people quite excited except Bart,because he knew the sonw was granted by God.He hit the books when people celebrated Sonw Day outside of his window.
At the end,Bart got a D minus and passed the exam.What a cheerful ending!Bart spit on the ground because he was too happy to control himself in celebration of his success by kissing the teacher on the face,and this made me laugh again.
uh...I'm sure you've put in alot of effort in writing this,however,there is still much room for improvement.My grammer skills aren't the best,but I hope I helped you in the least bit.