谁能帮我检查这几篇论文有没有什么语病.如有,请更正.Everyonehavehobbies,Iamalsothesame.Myhobbyisasport.Itisadepyprojectofourcountry.Yes,itisbadminton.Ilikethissportverymuch,itcantakeourbodystronger.Ever

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谁能帮我检查这几篇论文有没有什么语病.如有,请更正.
Everyone have hobbies,I am also the same.My hobby is a sport.It is adepy project of our country.Yes,it is badminton.I like this sport very much,it can take our body stronger.Every once catches the ball,can let me excited.But want to play badminton well,is not easy.Must have the indomitable perseverance,must have a strong body...So,I must still do more exercise.I can have progress in badminton.How about you?
Mobile phone,a magical items.It can help us in different places.Now,the functions are becoming more and more complete mobile.This is a good thing.But some people use mobile phones diddle property.Thus,mobile phones became bad items.So,we must be able to use mobile phones,do not use them harm to our life.

Answer 1

1：第一句,everyone 是单数,所以改用has
2：第二句,不算语病,但是改成so do I 更好
3：第二行：take our body stronger,take改成make
4：第三行：can let me excited,有2个错误,没主语,excited是被动,没动词,改成I am excited about.
5：第三行：want to play缺主语,I want to play
6：第三行：is not easy缺主语,改成it's not easy
7：第四行：I must still do more.读着别扭……改成I have to do
第二段
1：第一行：a magical item,不是复数
2：第二行：不知道你想表达个什么意思?想表达手机的功能越来越先进了?可以说become more and more advanced
3：第三行：时态:became
4：第三行：逻辑不通,因为手机不好所以我们就要用手机?改成So we must learn how to use cell phone wisely
5；最后一句：to harm our life,少to