帮我纠正下这篇speech的语法错误,GoodmorningeveryoneI’mverygladtostandhereandgiveyouashortspeech.Todaymytopicis“mygreatsister”.Mysisterisolder3yearsthanme,butIdolearnalotfromher.Becausemyparentsare

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帮我纠正下这篇speech的语法错误,
Good morning everyone I’m very glad to stand here and give you a short speech.Today my topic is “my great sister”.
My sister is older 3 years than me,but I do learn a lot from her.Because my parents are too busy to care about us,in my memory I always spent my time with my sister and she gave me all her love to take care of me.She teach me who to study,how to respect the old,how to be a good girl and so on.It can be said that no my sister,no me here today.I do appreciate my sister in my deepest heart.
My sister is really a good girl.It is she who taught me to help other.I can remember a thing that happened to us.It was a Sunday afternoon,my sister and I went to a park.When we were waiting for the bus to go home,we heard a boy who had same age with me crying at the bus station.My sister came up to him and learned of that the boy had lost his money and couldn’t get to his home.My sister looked at me and said:Sophia,how poor this boy” “Yes,and we are poor too.” I said.My sister said:let’s have him ok?“How” I asked curiously.“Give him the money to help him to go home.” “But we only have enough to go home” I can’t agree to do it.My sister smiled and told me that” dear,we can walk home as though it a chance to exercise.No only can it help this poor boy,but also we can do some exercise.Ok?” At last we walked home happily.And I was very proud of my sister,even me.
My sister had ever done a great thing for me.
It is a true story.When we are children,my family was very poor.It was a new term for the students to go back to school.But my family didn’t have enough money to support us to go to school together.When my father was in a dilemma,my sister,with a smile on her face,told my father:Dad took Sophia to school.I am fine.After hearing what my sister said,my mother can’t help to crying.Every time I think of this moment,I always thanks for my sister thousand of time in my heart.And every time I talked about this to my sister,she always said that:Because you are my sister.
Thanks for my great sister.It is she who gave me the chance to study.It is she who teaches me everything.It is she who always with me.She is going to marry the next year.Although I don’t want to separate from her,I really want her to be the happiest bride in the world.Thanks for my great sister.And thanks all of you sharing my stories.Thanks!

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着实费了我不少劲啊...废话不说,该后的在这里：
Good morning everyone.Today I’m very glad to stand here and give you a short speech,on the topic “my great sister”.
My sister is only three years older than me,but I do learn a lot from her.Because my parents are too busy to take care of us,I have spent much of my time with my sister and she therefore,takes the role of my guardian.She teaches me who to study,how to respect the old,how to be a good girl and so on.It is my sister who has shaped what I am now.I do appreciate my sister from my deepest heart.
My sister is really a good girl (kind person).It is she who taught me to help others (she teaches me to be altruistic and give out my hand when others need help).I can still remember one thing that happened to us.It was a Sunday afternoon,my sister and I went to a park.When we were waiting for the bus to go home,we heard a boy,who had same age as me,crying at the bus station.My sister came to him and learned that the boy had lost his money and couldn’t return home.My sister looked at me and said:“‘what a poor boy” “Yes,but we are poor too.” I said.Yet my sister said:let’s help him ok?“How” I asked curiously.“Give him some money so he can go back home.” “But we only have enough to go home” I could not agree with her.My sister smiled and told me that” dear,we can walk home; just take it as a chance to exercise.Besides,No only can it help this poor boy,but also we can do some exercise.Ok?” At last we walked home happily,and I was very proud of my sister.
It is a real story.When I was a child,my family was very poor.It was a new term for the students to go back to school.But my family didn’t have enough money to support my sister and me to go to school together.My father was in a dilemma.My sister,however,with a smile on her face,told my father:Dad took Sophia to school.I am fine.After hearing what my sister said,my mother can’t help crying.Every time I think of this moment,I always thank my sister thousands of time in my heart,for what he has done.And every time I talked about this to my sister,she always said that:Because you are my sister.
Thanks for my great sister.It is she who gave me the chance to study.It is she who teaches me everything.It is she who is always with me.She is going to get married next year.Although I don’t want to be separated from her,I really want her to be the happiest bride in the world.Thanks for my great sister.And thanks all of you sharing my stories.Thanks!
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