请帮我修改一下我的英语日记好吗?2012.2.13.TodayisthefirstdaythatIbegantowritesomethinginEnglish.IhopeIcankeepit.Justthen,theteacherwhoundertheflagsaidalotabouttheboringchool.ButIjustwanttosaythatIha

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请帮我修改一下我的英语日记好吗?
2012.2.13.
Today is the first day that I began to write something in English.I hope I can keep it.
Just then,the teacher who under the flag said a lot about the boring chool.But I just want to say that I hate school very much,not study,just school.
In the noon,after lunch ,I had a short sleep and made a dream that I become a besketball team's manager and Gongchengliangtian become my boyfriend.I‘m so happy about it because I think the besketballl player are so cool and strong.I also want to get strong and could save the world.
Write my feeling in English make me feel unconfortable,but I will try my best to adjust it.

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Today is the first day I begin to write something in English. I hope I can keep it.
At this moment, a teacher is standing under the flag and talking about a lot stuff about the school, which are every boring, and make me sick of school, but I still like to study.
After lunch, I had a nap and had a dream. In that dream, I became a manager of a basketball team, and Gongchengliangtian became my boyfriend. I was so happy because I think the basketball players are so cool and strong. I also want to get stronger so that I could save the world.
Writing in English make me feel unconfortable, but I will try my best to adap to it.
Just then, 没用过, 所以不太懂你要表达的是什么时候, 我百度了下, 是"在这时候", 所以我用了 At this moment.
你还有很多的动词时态问题...
我写的是比较美式的, 口语化的, 希望你能接受吧.