求翻译sleepingatlast的light这首歌的中文歌词一直觉得自己翻译的没有达到音乐的感觉，想表达的内容丝毫看不出来，特此求位大神翻译一下就像——“我燃烧了一颗行星，只为和你说再见”M

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求翻译sleeping at last的light这首歌的中文歌词
一直觉得自己翻译的没有达到音乐的感觉，想表达的内容丝毫看不出来，特此求位大神翻译一下
就像——“我燃烧了一颗行星，只为和你说再见”
May these words be the first
To find your ears.
The world is brighter than the sun
Now that you're here.
Though your eyes will need some time to adjust
To the overwhelming light surrounding us,
I'll give you everything I have.
I'll teach you everything I know.
I promise I'll do better.
I will always hold you close,
But I will learn to let you go.
I promise I'll do better.
I will soften every edge,
I'll hold the world to its best,
And I'll do better.
With every heartbeat I have left
I will defend your every breath,
And I'll do better.
cause you are loved.
You are loved more than you know.
I hereby pledge all of my days
To prove it so.
Though your heart is far too young to realize
The unimaginable light you hold inside,
I'll give you everything I have.
I'll teach you everything I know.
I promise I'll do better.
I will always hold you close,
But I will learn to let you go.
I promise I'll do better.
I will rearrange the stars,
Pull 'em down to where you are.
I promise, I'll do better.
With every heartbeat I have left,
I'll defend your every breath.
I promise I'll do better.
I will soften every edge,
Hold the world to its best.
I promise I'll do better.
With every heartbeat I have left,
I'll defend your every breath,
(I'll do better.)

Answer 1

我也只是试试，没有直译，相对来说意译多一点

May these words be the first to find your ears.
希望这些最初的诺言能萦绕于你耳边
The world is brighter than the sun now that you're here.
有了你的世界比阳光更加耀眼
Though your eyes will need some time to adjust
纵然这强烈的白炽
To the overwhelming light surrounding us,
会暂时刺伤你的眸子
I'll give you everything I have.
我会给你我拥有的一切
I'll teach you everything I know.
我会教给你所有知识
I promise I'll do better.
我承诺要做的更好
I will always hold you close,
更紧地将你拥在怀抱
But I will learn to let you go.
却明白学会放手，给你更多的自由
I promise I'll do better.
我保证会做的更好
I will soften every edge,
我会融化你的棱角
I'll hold the world to its best,
让世界更加美妙
And I'll do better.
而我也会做的更好
With every heartbeat I have left
凭着我剩余的每次心跳
I will defend your every breath,
誓死捍卫你的微笑
And I'll do better.
我会做的更好
cause you are loved.
因为你呵，你被我宠溺
You are loved more than you know.
也许你并不知道
I hereby pledge all of my days
所以我用尽一生岁月
To prove it so.
向你证明
Though your heart is far too young to realize
但你却也许太过年轻
The unimaginable light you hold inside,
你的内心无比光明
I will rearrange the stars,
我会重新排列漫天繁星
Pull 'em down to where you are
通通摘下，只为你照明