刚刚的作文不用看了大修改了一下,之前有点晕,谢了Somepeoplebelievethatthereshouldbefixedpunishmentsforeachtypeofcrime.Other,however,arguethatcircumstancesofanindividualcrime,andthemotivationforcommittin

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刚刚的作文不用看了 大修改了一下,之前有点晕,谢了
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Other, however, argue that circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays advancement of human civilization and development of legal system raise the argument on whether fixed penalty should be established for every type of offense. Some people advocate the proposal of making punishment tailored for each type of crime, while other assert that we should take something more like circumstances and incentives into the consideration when ruling. However, in my perspective, the latter view is much more acceptable.
The argument that supports the set up of the fixed penalty to different type of offense is not groundless. In fact, this practice, if possible, can bring us some benefits, what is meant by that is that it can raise the efficiency of dealing crime cases. For instance, a case, which might take several days to make the final judge, would be closed one or two seconds, even without judge’s professional assessment. Furthermore, such practice can also have some deterring effects on the individuals who tend to commit certain crimes, because they might be frighten by the punishment tailored in advance.
Nevertheless, such argument might underestimate the importance of the other factors, such as the positions of the criminals and the reasons why they commit crimes, and these factors play a crucial role in court as supplemental evidences to extend or relief the sentences.
By contrast, the latter argument recognizes the complex of common crimes, and it emphasizes crimes are the results of various outer and inner conditions, some of which might be unintentional and can be understood. To better understand this, we make a comparison with nuance: one of the two guys who are charged of committing bank robbery did so, attempting to afford the expensive treatment of his mother, while the other one did so to satisfy the desire for luxury life. In the context, how can we give both of them the same punishments? The usual practice is to relief the penalty of the first guy for his bravery love to his mother, even though he did not choose the right way. From this example, we definitely need consider these important factors when making decisions.
To conclude, in my opinion, although making fixed punishment associated with each type of crimes contributes to a more efficient court, it undermines the most valuable part- that is the judge’s professional and comprehensive evaluation to the complex situations. Therefore, these factors, no matter subjective or objective should be taken seriously.

Answer 1

可以的
虽然我看起来很累,没有一目了然的感觉
既然你的观点是分级惩处,那这个优势应该篇幅更多一点
还有语法错误,need to consider,自己再检查下
大致蛮不错 6分-7分