求英文介绍信的精彩开头结尾....是介绍自己的...入学申请...我写了...我们老师说...文章没有亮点...开头结尾太过简练....没有吸引力.....所以...请帮帮忙....我的原文是...I'dliketointroducemyself

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求英文介绍信的精彩开头结尾
....是介绍自己的...入学申请...我写了...我们老师说...文章没有亮点...开头结尾太过简练....没有吸引力.....所以...请帮帮忙....
我的原文是...
I'd like to introduce myself in this way.I would appreate it if you read this article patiently.
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I'm galde to be the person who I am.My ambitions,my dreams and many other things make me feel happy.If I could stand out in the fierce competation, I would try my best to study and make contributions to our great China.
说明一下...我是高中水平...写点我能看懂的...

Answer 1

sample college application essay,
beginning paragraph "
When I look at this picture of myself, I realize how much I've grown and changed, not only physically, but also mentally as a person in the last couple of years. Less than one month after this photograph was taken, I arrived at the [school's name] in [school's location] without any idea of what to expect. I entered my second year of high school as an innocent thirteen year-old who was about a thousand miles from home and was a new member of not the sophomore (10th grade)"
ending
"As the college experience approaches, I am still the same person, only modified to better maximize my talents. Although I still have some time to play tennis and see movies, perhaps one of the few similarities between this photograph and me now is my smile."