高手帮我修改下这份简历（语法.词汇.格式方面的错误）ResumePersonalInformationName:****Gender:MALEDateofBirth:1986/10/24Residency:ShanghaiWorkExperience:StudentHukou:SHANGHAIAddress:****ZipCode:SelfAssessmentOut-go

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高手帮我修改下这份简历（语法.词汇.格式方面的错误）
Resume
Personal Information
Name:****
Gender:MALE
Date of Birth:1986/10/24
Residency:Shanghai
Work Experience:Student
Hukou:SHANGHAI
Address:****
Zip Code:
Self Assessment
Out-going,enthusiastic about learning,responsible and creative,finds satisfaction and pleasure in teamwork,able to communicate with supervisors and staff.
Career Objective
Type of Employment:Intern/Trainee
Desired Location:Shanghai
Desired Salary:Negotiable /Month
Desired Position:Intern
Work Experience
2007/07--2007/09：Shanghai High quality Family education Company
Industry:Education/Training
Family education Tutor
Summer arranges the family by the company to carry on the family education
2006/07--2006/09：Common people work place （Shanghai）Cultural development Limited company
Industry:Furniture/Home Appliances/Arts & Craft/Toys
Sales Regional Sales Manager
As company commercial representative,the independence organizes the personnel to complete the company in Songjiang District area present sale duty.sended the placard through on-line forum,sent ways and so on circular to seek for 3 schoolmates to sell together.Summer vacation 2 months through visit to sell obtain certain achievement .
Education
2005/09--Present DongHua University Macromolecule Materials Engineering Bachelor
Material Science and Engineering specialty including polymer chemistry,High polymer physics ,The chemical principle and so on a series and chemistry chemical industry related curriculum .
Extra-curriculars
2006/08--2007/09 Director-General of the Ministry of student life Leadership Position
Minister of personnel to complete the task,while he was organizing school students to participate in the fruits height match competition bedroom outstanding selection,and other activities,better impact.
Language Skills
English GOOD
（我对自己的英文水平不是很信任,所以再此请求高手的指导,简历中有什么语法错误,或者哪些地方不符合简历的要求的请多多指出,帮帮我提出一点修正,）

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Self Assessment
Out-going,enthusiastic about learning,responsible and creative,finds(你这里的主语是什么,是我的话,finds就错了.)satisfaction and pleasure in teamwork,able to communicate with supervisors and staff.（你是不是想说,和上司同事相处友好啊?如果是我,我会这么写：）
be able to communicate with supervisors and staff in perfet harmony.