请英语高手帮忙修改一篇作文,Nopains,nogainsNotlongagoIsawanewsthatapersoninHenanprovincewin360millionYuanbybuyinglotterytickets.WhenIsawthisnews,Ithinkitisnoneofmybusiness.Thenafewsecondslater,Isudden

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请英语高手帮忙修改一篇作文,
No pains,no gains
Not long ago I saw a news that a person in Henan province win 360 million Yuan by buying lottery tickets.When I saw this news,I think it is none of my business.Then a few seconds later,I suddenly realized it is 360 million,so enviable figure!Be nice I were him.
But I just dreamed about it for a moment,then I came back to the real word.He is a lucky dog,the most lucky man all across China.He had a large sum of money,do what he want to do,go where he want to go,he and his family’s life will be changed.Perhaps this is unfortunate.As Chinese proverb said:” Misfortune,that is where happiness depends; happiness,that is where misfortune underlies.”
Everyone has dreams of riches,everyone wants to enjoy an easy life,while in general there are three means for accessing to wealth,The first one is to buy such lottery tickets and stocks to become a millionaire overnight,but this kind of person is too scarce,and they will have a strong sense of fear after became rich,mostly opt to move to hide in an unfamiliar place.The second one is through illegal means to obtain wealth,this kind of person is also a small part of all,and their wealth is evil,even if they can enjoy a few years,but many instances have proved that one day they will be sanctioned according to law.This is the so-called:“Justice has long arms.”Finally relying on our own hands,dedicated ourselves to the work and get access to wealth is one of the largest and most common way,perhaps this approach is the slowest and the most difficult,but it is the most secure,most real,most sweet.No panic,no evil,it is the happiness from your heart.For the person in Henan province whom be said that he is just lucky,I think it is not simply an objective,he bets 44 times on the same number of one lottery ticket,which explains he is a visionary person,he is a genius,can’t say as fortunate.So can be seen,there is no unearned success,there is no rich man without any pay.From this,I think we need to redouble our work and learning,because our life is created by ourselves,not by luck nor by opportunistic.What we need is down-to-earth.I hope everyone here will have a bright future by your own efforts,and remember the truth:“No pains,on gains.”

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1,第二行的 win 改为 won,这是过去的新闻,应该要用过去式.所以换成won.2,Everyone has dreams of riches 应该改成 Everyone has dreams of being rich.3,there are three means for accessing to wealth 中的 access...