求帮我改英语作文!有一位好朋友叫李林,16岁,个子不高,衣着朴素,努力学习,独立完成作业,各科成绩优良,待人谦虚,乐于助人,耐帮助我学英语,喜欢音乐,爱好体育Ihaveafrined,he'snameisLiMing,he'i

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求帮我改英语作文!
有一位好朋友叫李林,16岁,个子不高,衣着朴素,努力学习,独立完成作业,各科成绩优良,待人谦虚,乐于助人,耐帮助我学英语,喜欢音乐,爱好体育
I have a frined,he's name is LiMing,he' is a lot tall .and always wear a simp Clothing.he is a good Student,he study hard,do your homework alone ,every subject has good,do modest to every body,and he alse loving help with his firends,for example,he help me study enlish,he like music ,like PE
大家给我些建议吧.比如该学点什么看什么内容什么的!

Answer 1

你好,很高兴为您解答问题,根据你的大致内容,修改如下：
I have a 16 year-old friend called LiLin, he is not very tall (a lot tall 没听说过,但如果你想表达有一点高但不是很高,可以使用a little bit, 因此也可以写为he is a little bit tall.) and always wears some simple clothes(不可能总穿一套衣服,因此冠词应该不能用a.). He is a good student because he awlays study hard and does his homework alone.(学习好与刻苦学习最好连成因果关系,个人感觉好点.) Every subject is his strength.（这句话的意思是：所有的学科都是他的强项.当然,也可以写成：he is good at every subject 他擅长每一科.）He is also a modest and helpful student and always do us a favor.(他是个谦虚有乐于助人的学生,经常帮助我们.do sb. a favor 帮某人忙.) For example, he is willing to help me to improve my English.(举个例子,他很乐意帮助我提高英语水平.willing 愿意；improve 提高) He has many hobbies such as music, PE.(他有很多爱好,如体育,音乐.such as 例如,初中应该已经用到了.)
有一些地方我做出了适当的改写,但都符合你的汉语表述,汉语意思都写在后面的括号里了.这些知识点应该没有超出初中范围.希望对你有所帮助.
给你提几点意见：
1 多看看基础知识,有一些固定搭配不要用错,人称也很重要.
2 写作文切记直接汉译英,这样会使很多句子句意不通,要根据英文的规则进行搭配,教材里课 文要多读读,好的段落背一背,对于积累英语知识和写作都有帮助.
3 稍微多级一些亮点词,可以为你的作文增色不少,这一点在中考时可以发挥不少作用.
希望你的英语水平早日得到提高!