英文商业书信怎么把这封信转述成正式的?DearBankManagerIhopeyouarewellandyourbusinessisok.Mybusinessisn’tgoodsoIneedyourhelp.Iwantabout£10,000sothatIcandosomerepairstomyshopandbuysomethings

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英文 商业书信 怎么把这封信转述成正式的?
Dear Bank Manager
I hope you are well and your business is ok.My business isn’t good so I need your help.I want about £10,000 so that I can do some repairs to my shop and buy some things I need.
I want you to loan me some money and I will pay it back later when my business gets better
Let me know asap.
Thank you for your help
xxx
不是翻译~是从非正式的转述为正式的。
Informal--->formal..
比如:
Let me know asap.--->I look forward to hearing from you soon.或者 Kindly consider this subject as early as possible

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Dear Bank Manager
I hope you are well and your business is ok.My business isn’t good so I need your help.I want about £10,000 so that I can do some repairs to my shop and buy some things I need.
I want you to loan me some money and I will pay it back later when my business gets better
Let me know asap.
Thank you for your help
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