修改提高英语作文原因（1）中国63%的城市面临水源缺乏,污染和工业化恶化了这种情况；（2）大量树木被砍伐,森林覆盖率急剧下降；（3）水利工程没有合理运用,灌溉系统过于陈旧.（1）提

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修改提高英语作文
原因
（1）中国63%的城市面临水源缺乏,污染和工业化恶化了这种情况；
（2）大量树木被砍伐,森林覆盖率急剧下降；
（3）水利工程没有合理运用,灌溉系统过于陈旧.
（1）提高节约用水,合理用水,循环用水的意识；
（2）多植树,保护环境,防止水土流失；
（3）政府应加大资金投入,及时维修水利工程.
What Lessons Should Be Learned From the Drought
The drought in the south-west China lasts for several months,which makes people face water and food scarcity.We should learn lessons from it.
The drought can be cause by several factors.
For one reason ,63% of the urban areas in China are confronting a serious problem that there seems to be far less water to meet our daily need and pollution and industrialisation make this worse.For another ,a plenty of trees are cut down ,result in the increasing of forest disappear.What's more ,people don't use the water conservancy project properly ,the irrigation system are too old to use as well.We should raise our awareness of saving water,using water when it's neccessary,and recycling water in different part in our life and plant trees to protect the environment so as to prevent the soil and water from wasting ,The government need to pay more money to fix the irrigation work in time.
总分15

Answer 1

大体不错,有个别小错误和表达的生硬,基本上可以得12-14分,建议保持,本人不错修改了.