这句话错在哪里?应该如何改?Help cultivate children’s independence,self-determination and develop a strong sense of responsibility and thus they will be more confident,independent and worldly wise.

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这句话错在哪里?应该如何改?
Help cultivate children’s independence,self-determination and develop a strong sense of responsibility and thus they will be more confident,independent and worldly wise.

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Helping to cultivate children's independence,self determination and devloping a strong sense of responsibility and thus they will be more confident,independent and worldly wise