帮我修改一下英语推荐信,主要是语法问题.DearAdmissionsOfficer,IconsideritagreatpleasuretorecommendtoyouMiss.ZhangXiaoming,whomIhaveknownforalongtimeasaveryoutstandingstudent.IbecameacquaintedwithMiss.Zh

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帮我修改一下英语推荐信,主要是语法问题.
Dear Admissions Officer,
I consider it a great pleasure to recommend to you Miss. Zhang Xiaoming, whom I have known for a long time as a very outstanding student.
I became acquainted with Miss. Zhang personally when she registered in my course of Communication Theories in the first semester of 2010. The young girl is the only one international student in our class. I admire her for her continuance of study whatever Chinese teaching or English teaching. And she always got A in the final examination.
As far as I could remember, she studied very hard and had self-change attempts. I believe she would successfully finish the courses which she would like to apply for now. In particular, she has increased significantly the level of speech in these years. In our class, she is distinguished herself by the quality of analytical ability. In addition, she not only have inquisitive and initiative character, but also she shows her excellent ability of expressing efficiently and thinking independently．
She was a shy girl in the beginning, but she became much more confident after learning my course. As to prove my opinion upon her, she accepted the challenge and finished some tasks successfully at last. Her good performance has made her popular to her fellow students. Besides, I feel very proud that she has the dream for go further education to the UK.
Without reservation I recommend Miss. Zhang Xiaoming to you. I am much grateful if you can consider her favorably. If you need further information, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Sincerely.
语法问题太多 希望帮忙都揪出来 谢谢!

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哈哈,楼主真是把中式英语发挥到极致了^^ 建议你去看看网上reference letter的sample,然后再写.因为你这个东西问题太多,不仅仅是每句话都有语法问题,内容也有问题,听起来很casual也不符合鬼佬的表达习惯.要改的话相当于完全重写一篇,恕在下没有太多时间来改你这个东西...另外还有一点就是,推荐信这个东西写成这么casual会显得有点搞笑：）不好意思说得有点直接,不过我是善意的哈～
帮你大概弄个structure吧
称呼
As xxx(你的身份),I have had the pleasure of knowing zhang xiaoming for the last xx years.She has been a tremendous student and an asset to our school.I would like to take this opportunity to recommend zhang xiaoming for your xxx course.（在此写具体申请的是什么course/degree）
At all times I have found her to be a hard-working,honest,and courteous person.(各种形容词你可以根据需要来改) I feel confident that she will continue to succeed in her further studies.
这个地方写写她的各种成就,太细节的东西真的就不用写了.
It is for these reasons that I offer high recommendations for zhang xiaoming without reservation.She will add great deal to any incoming xxxx course/program.
Please contact me if there is anything else I can do on her behalf.
sincerely,
xxx