看看我写的英文自我介绍有没有错?就看下语法哪里不对,其他的不用管Hi!Pleaseletmeintroducemyself.MynameisJax,iam18yearsold.Iamhumorousandoptimisticman.IamfromGuangdongprovincebutnowistudyinChongqin

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看看我写的英文自我介绍有没有错?
就看下语法哪里不对,其他的不用管
Hi!Please let me introduce myself .My name is Jax,i am 18 years old .I am humorous and optimistic man.I am from Guangdong province but now i study in Chongqing.
As a college student,i major in Information Management.Although i have to stay at room and use computer to pogramming in school,i prefer outdoors activities and
make friends with people from all over the world.So I have been interested in this program for a long time and i chose this job so that i can enrich my experiences
and broaden my horizon.
I have been working at Chimelong Water Park as a pool attendant for 1 month.I can swim and also know some basic first aid treatment skills.Everytime before the
pool open,i must teach the children and watch them when they swim patiently.They called me big brother and loved me very much.After several experiences,
I learn a lot not only about the working skills but also the communications with different people.
I think i am a adaptble man,no matter what job,give me ,i would put my mind to it and work hard without campagin .
There is a famous saying in china that "every trade has its master".
I like swimming and football.As a member in school team,i know the importance of teamwork.I am always addicted to America music such as Hotel California.I can play
the guitar like I'm yours by Ukulele .I think I can active atmosphere and make others happy.
To be honest,i really want to have a nice experience in America.I am strongly convinced that i can do my work well.Could you please give me a chance so that i can realize
my dream .Thank you very much.
Best wishes

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看看下面的内容,已经给你作出修改.请注意有一些字 (比如 I) 需要大写.你自己找找,改好就行.
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Hi!Please let me introduce myself .My name is Jax,i am 18 years old.I am a humorous and optimistic man.I am from Guangdong province and now i am studying in Chongqing.
As a college student,i major in Information Management.Very often I have to stay in my school to make use of computers for programming studies,but I prefer outdoor activities and make friends with people from all over the world.I am interested in this (应该用your,如果是想说对方的一些工作计划) program for a long time and i choose this job so that i can enrich my experiences and broaden my horizon.
(如果是之前工作过的,应该说：“I had worked at…”比较好) I have been working at Chimelong Water Park as a pool attendant for 1 month.I can swim and also know some basic first aid treatment skills.Every time before the pool opens,I would teach the children and watch them patiently when they are swimming.They called me the “Big Brother” and loved me very much.After several incidents,I learned a lot not only about the job but also the communication skills dealing with different people.
I am an adaptive person,no matter what job is given to me,I would put my mind to it and work hard without complaint.
My motto is a famous saying in China:"Every trade has its master" and I want to be the master of my trade!
I like swimming and football.As a member of the school team,I know the importance of teamwork.I always like American music such as Hotel California.I can play the guitar well and I like the song “I'm yours” by Ukulele.In group activities,I can lighten up the atmosphere and make others happy.
To be honest,I really want to gain some nice experience in America.I am confident that I can do my work well.Could you please give me a chance so that help your organization and also realize my own dream?
Thank you for your positive consideration and best regards,
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