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同学们,在日常的生活学习中,我们从侧面了解了各个行业的艰辛与魅力,那么你们有自己的职业规划吗?请按要求以“Mydreamjob”为题,完成一篇不少于120个单词的作文。内容包

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同学们,在日常的生活学习中,我们从侧面了解了各个行业的艰辛与魅力,那么你们有自己的职业规划吗?请按要求以“My dream job” 为题,完成一篇不少于120个单词的作文。

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What is your dream job? 2. Give your reasons.

What you should do to achieve your dream.

If I can choose my own profession I would like to be…

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One possible version:If I can choose my own profession I would like to be a doctor.Illnesses and diseases always bring pains and sufferings to us humans but doctors can help us get rid of them. Doctors are trained to know the causes of different kinds of illnesses and the best ways to cure the patients. They can bring patients from illness to happiness and give the hope to live on.To be a doctor is not easy for everyone. It requires a kind heart and a difficult process of learning. But I have the faith in realizing my dream and overcome all the difficulties. Misunderstood as doctors may be they deserve to be respected.I'll work hard to learn as much as possible particularly chemistry mathematics and physics. To realize my dream of becoming a doctor I will spare my effort without hesitation.130 words
审题:题目中要求写作内容需要包括三点:第一点是什么是你理想的职业,作者在第一段就直截了当地表明自己理想的职业是医生;第二点是为什么想从事这个职业,作者在第二段论述了自己的理由,即可以减轻病人的痛苦,给他们带来快乐;第三点是为了目标职业将会做出哪些努力,作者先在第三段表明想要成为医生要面临很多困难,然后在最后一段表明自己的决心并表示会努力用功学习。从而可以看出,作者在审题方面做得非常好,非常扣题。写作技巧:作者根据题目中要求来完成写作任务,条理清晰;文中使用了一些固定短语及搭配: get rid of,live on,have the faith in,deserve to,spare effort 等使文章显得很干练;文中使用了较多的语法知识,倒装句Misunderstood as doctors may be they deserve to be respected.,目的状语从句 To realize my dream of becoming a doctor I will spare my effort without hesitation.,不定式引导的主语从句To be a doctor is not easy for everyone.这些从句等语法的使用提升了文章的档次,将基本要点清晰地呈现在读者面前,同时也显示较高的语法知识点使用能力。问题指出:文章缺乏连接词,句子与句子之间衔接不够顺畅,可适当增加“Besides”“While”“Firstly”“Secondly”“As far as I am concerned”等连接词使行文更加流畅。
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