一位同学写的英语作文（初中）,ProblemsAmongTeenagersAsateenager.Ihavealotofproblemssuchashomeworkandsomethings.Inmyschool,therearealotofhomeworks.Wealwaysshoulddothehomeworkuntilthe11o'clock.sometimeeven12

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一位同学写的英语作文（初中）,
Problems Among Teenagers
As a teenager.I have a lot of problems such as homework and some things.In my school,there are a lot of homeworks.We always should do the homework until the 11o'clock.sometime even 12 o'clock.I feel very tried for the homework.But i find a way to change this.I can do the homework in the class.Then use some sentences that let me afraid.I feel very sad even hate the classmates.I think out a way about this thing.Do not to they.It is a best way for me.

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Problems Among Teenagers
As a teenager.I have a lot of problems such as （加一个with,have problem with sth.)homework and some(some改为other会比较好）things.In my school,there are a lot of homeworks.We always should（把should 和always换下位置 或者改成we are always supposed to) do the homework until the(跟后面的12o'clock一样 此处不用the) 11o'clock.sometime even 12 o'clock.I feel very tried（单词拼写错误 你想写的应该是tired) for(对某事厌烦是be tired of 此处用错了） the homework.But i find（have found这里可以用现在完成进行时态）a way to change this（这里完全可以加一个situation）.I can do the homework in the class.Then use some sentences that let me afraid.（这句话不能理解 是不是你想写你的同学们说你这样不好 首先 单词错误they而不是then 按你的意思 可以改成they said something that made me feel afaid.） I feel（用过去式felt） very sad (此处加一个and ）even hate（过去式哦 hated) the classmates(可以用them 代替）.I think(过去式哦 thought) out a way（改成to solve this problem可能会比较好哦) about this thing.Do not to they.（这里是不是想表达 不理他们?这样的话可以连着后面那句 用it is the best way for me to regardless of them)It is a best way for me.
我觉得整体来说 还是写的不错的.不过在今后的写作中 要注意时态还有单词拼写的问题.
ps：最好不好在课堂上写作业咯 因为 这样 也许你就会漏掉老师在课堂上讲的内容啦 不要因小失大哦~
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