小弟英文太撇,这是一篇英文演讲稿自我感觉写得嘿没自信DreamGoodmorning,everyone.MynameisJiangXialin.I’mverygladtostandhereandgiveyouashortspeech.Todaymytopicisdream,Ihopeyouwilllikeitandfoundadream

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小弟英文太撇,
这是一篇英文演讲稿
自我感觉写得嘿没自信
Dream
Good morning,everyone.My name is Jiang Xialin.I’m very glad to stand here and give you a short speech.Today my topic is dream,I hope you will like it and found a dream is important to your life so that more cherish it.
First,I want to ask you same questions：
Do you have a dream?
Why do you make that dream?
How do you treat your dream?
Dream：
Dream is somebody’s expectation for the future.Dream is somebody’s design for the future on themselves thought.A dream is to a man what wings are to a bird.A life without a dream is like a bird with broken wings.Confined to a cage and oblivious of what lies beyond the range of its vision.On the contrary,a man with a dream is like a warrior armed with ambition,foresight and gallantry,daring to step into an unknown domain to make a journey of adventure.It is dream that is adds fullness,variety and spice to our life and makes it worth living.
However,there is always a gap between dream and reality.we still remembered king’s loudly voice：“I have a dream that one day .”,And from then on,all the Negro fighting for this dream.Although the discrimination has become better than before,Negro have not the really parity with others up to now,this is precisely reality.
At one time,maybe your dream is to study in Tsinghua University or Beijing University,as well you work day and night for this dream.But at last,you have not carried out it successfully,because you have come to Chongqing University.This is the very reality too.From above two examples,we can easily find that there is a gap between the dream and the reality.
Generally speaking,dream overtop reality,in this manner,we will receive buffet from reality.Face to inspect from reality above,what we should do?Someone may discard his dream,someone may change his dream.However,we can not lost sight of following truth.Conversely,if only your dream rooted in the reality,we may find that if the reality reaches the dream easily,following it,what we should pursue?So we should work hard to let the reality to approach dream.More hard we work,more near reality to ours dream.
I say to you,my dear friends,so even though we must face the difficulties of today and tomorrow,we must hold dreams.At last,I will sent you some words：believe you can fly,believe you can take the sky,hard working,you may realize your dreams.
That all,thank you!

Answer 1

十足Chinese English呢~我的水平还没到挑什么具体的语法错误,但就语言表达来看太累赘而且不符合英语的表达方式.
eg:Today my topic is dream,当然,我们会说,今天我的题目是什么什么,但在英文演讲里,我们一般会说,today,I'll talk about dream.或者用你的原句的话,一定要注意停顿和发音.
eg1:I hope you will like it and found a dream is important to your life so that more cherish it.从中文意思看是明白你在说什么啦,但英文表达上,首先hope后面要跟虚拟语气,然后,found后面建议改成dream is so important to your life that you can more cherish.
eg2:Dream is somebody’s expectation for the future.
建议在衔接题目与这样的正题时可以加句,“as we all know”之类的关联一下.
另外,在英语表达里习惯性“……的”不是都加's,在定语比较多的情况下很多时候会用of来引渡.所以这句我觉得是改成Dream is the expctation for the future of a people,后面的也有这种情况~
汗……看下去偶都有点晕也……太久没好好看英文了~以上意见仅供参考~