Today ,I went to the Shanghai Ninth People's hospital to see the dentist.求指点语法错误写了一段日记,求指点语法错误:Today ,I went to the Shanghai Ninth People's hospital to see the dentist.Because i have several cavities.Actually,I

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Today ,I went to the Shanghai Ninth People's hospital to see the dentist.求指点语法错误
写了一段日记,求指点语法错误:
Today ,I went to the Shanghai Ninth People's hospital to see the dentist.Because i have several cavities.Actually,I knew my teeth have decayed before one year ago.But I am afraid to see dentist,so I delayed to see the doctor until now.
I took a bus then transfer the subway line 4 to go to the hospital.After registered,I saw the dentist,but she just made an appointment for me to remedy my teeth next time.

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I knew my teeth have decayed before one year ago.- I know my teeth have been decayed for more than a year.感觉蛀牙是不是被动语态?然后完成时后面不跟before
But I am afraid to see dentist,so I delayed to see the doctor until now-你已经去看了牙医了,就应该是I was so afraid to see the dentist that I didn't go to see any until now.比较好
transfer－改成 change to 比较好吧?而且感觉外国说地铁几号线,几号应该在前面,line4 subway.
After registered-after registration就可以了.
然后后面可以这样写,I did see the doctor,but she didn't do anything to my teeth but made an appointment for next time treatment.我的确见到了牙医,但是她什么也没做,只是预约了下次的就诊日期.
你结尾可以说,如果知道要预约,我早就去了,什么的.